Pros
The lead explained the purpose for the article and what you were going to learn by reading it. The lead does not try to grab your attention with a clever line because the topic is so urgent that it will get people read.
One thing that I did like was the way they wrote out the information about the all of the candidates’ past illness. There were a lot of numbers and dates thrown at the reader but the reporter was able to bring it all together by describing how the illness could affect the candidates in the future and how it should affects our vote. The pack number system showed that even though Obama is healthy now that there is always a chance that he will fall victim to the many smoke related disease that are out there. The countless surgeries that McCain has had showed that his melanoma can return at any moment.
The reporter did what he could with the information he gathered about Sarah Palin and still wrote some very interesting set of words. I especially liked how he wrote the story about her water breaking at a conference in Dallas and how she had to fly over to Alaska at race against time to get her baby delivered.
The Ronald Reagan quote “resign” shows that the only option that some of these candidates have is to quit if their illness returns or they get infested with a new one.
Cons
When the writer said that McCain’s 1,200 page medical information was released in a restricted way that it still does not answer questions; I wanted to know what he meant by that.
I would place accounts from the summary in the article a little earlier. For example, the story about Mr. Tsongas withdrawing from the race could have gone nicely with the McCain’s story. The lack of information about Sarah Palin could have been buffed up by using the information about Mr. Eagleton being a running mate and because he did not released information about his illness then it cost him at the end. We don’t know a lot about Palin and there is chance that she might be hiding something to.
The article was seen from eyes as a tool that would hurt McCain’s chance to win the election. The line “Mr. McCain’s difficulty raising his arms and his sometimes awkward gait are remnants of severe, untreated injuries he suffered in Vietnam.” really painted the picture of a beat up old man as well as someone who is pass their prime. I know the reporter it just writing out the facts but he shows a little favoritism towards Obama by portraying him as a strong individual who was able to fight against smoking even though he bummed a smoke during his campaign.
Wednesday, October 22, 2008
Wednesday, October 15, 2008
2ndstory
It is around 11 p.m; Hollan George is getting ready for work by making sure his blue security shirt is acceptable, sits down at his post shoeless, and gets ready for a long night.
It is just another day at the office for Mr. George as a John Jay college security guard. It can plainly be seen on his tired but focus face that he has just finished a four hour day of classes. George lets a long sigh as he says “The worse thing about the job is staying awake during the night shift, so you’ll do anything to stay up, like playing a “retard” version of stick ball with the other guards around you or eat food with sugar in it,” said George.
The life of a John Jay Security guard goes beyond any other departmental job. It may be the only job at the college where students are ordered to work a job shift of eight hours at any time of the day including at night, in order, to un hold the school’s safety. It is a job that requires them to deal with everything from validating parking to handling students drinking alcohol on campus.
Security guard Paul Treyman has been on the job for a year and so far he has seen his fair share of things that would scare people and have you bust out laughing. Treyman says with a smile on his face “Just today I had to carry a woman to the hospital because she was having a panic attack and later that day I was told by a student that she saw a girl in a bathroom stall with four men, I mean what the hell was she thinking, so I had to go handle it by kicking them out of the building. I didn’t even need to ask what she was doing, (laughs) feel me,” said Treyman.
The most ironic thing about it is that most of the people the guards watch over at the college may not get a chance to see what the guards do, which can cause a misconception of them.
Dixon Victory is a freshman who has already built his own image of the guards.
“The security around here is very loose; the system of signing students in if they do not have their cards is very bad because they can just write anything,” said Victory.
The guards are able to sense the lack of respect some of the student shave for them and it is also obvious from the similar answers that the student gave when asked about their colleagues’ protection.
“I know that they are students just like us so sometimes they will do their job and other times they will let their friends in without checking their cards,” said Krystal Jackson, a junior at the college
Kathy Bernard knows that the guards did show some favoritism towards certain students because she is one of them.
“The John Jay security guards are on a power trip, they need to go back to training but they still won’t serve a purpose” said Miss Bernard.
Miss Bernard is a graduate student who works for the Women Rights Center and is fed up with the guards’ hypocritical tendencies.
“They love raising their voices to tell me what to do and tell me not to double swipe when they do the same thing, and then try to act nice when they find out that I am apart of the staff which is not fair to the other students here,” said Bernard
The guards also have their own answer for the hostility they receive.
“All people think we do is sit on our ass all day, I must admit the job is easy for me but there is still the possibility of something going down” said George.
Security guard Jasmine Butler had the same misconstrued view of the guards before she started working four mouths ago and has already changed her mind.
“I have not seen some real action on the job but I did have a very bad view of guards before I became one, you have a better appreciate for the position when you are actually one of them,” said Butler
According to the Security Department manual, the position calls for students to complete a collection of training exercises that comes up to 24 state mandate hours. One of those exercises includes the students completing sixteen hours of lectures on the rules of the school, the security department, and what is expected of them as guards. As well as another six hours of probation on the job and the rest is made up on safety tips.
“We expect are guards to be mindful of people’s feeling, be aware of their environment, and protect the students of John Jay and their properties,” said Rabiyyah Williams, a Security Department’s offices employee who was also an ex-security guard herself.
The job also calls for the applicants to have the general of requirements of being an full time undergraduate with a GPA of at least 2.5. Their status must be above freshman level.
The guards are trained in CPR, crowd control, and the himelic maneuver for the students’ safety. There are also put on alert for any specific individuals that are planning to enter the school to harm a student; this service is especially good for the female student body that may have uncontrollable ex- boyfriends. There is a fair amount of homeless people in the area and it is their job to make sure that they do not come around the building to bother the students, which guard Franny Jerkins, say that may be the most difficult thing about the job for her.
“I demand people take me serious because if something happens then it is my fault,” said Jerkins
Regardless of the negative criticism the guards get, there are still some people who defend the guards no matter what. Allison Karvey, a history professor of four years at the college, was attacked by one her students a year ago who was found to be mentally unstable.
“I teach around 9 pm at the college so you really notice them and feel safe when they are around, they actual walk me to the train stations on some account to make sure I got there safely,” said Karvey
It is just another day at the office for Mr. George as a John Jay college security guard. It can plainly be seen on his tired but focus face that he has just finished a four hour day of classes. George lets a long sigh as he says “The worse thing about the job is staying awake during the night shift, so you’ll do anything to stay up, like playing a “retard” version of stick ball with the other guards around you or eat food with sugar in it,” said George.
The life of a John Jay Security guard goes beyond any other departmental job. It may be the only job at the college where students are ordered to work a job shift of eight hours at any time of the day including at night, in order, to un hold the school’s safety. It is a job that requires them to deal with everything from validating parking to handling students drinking alcohol on campus.
Security guard Paul Treyman has been on the job for a year and so far he has seen his fair share of things that would scare people and have you bust out laughing. Treyman says with a smile on his face “Just today I had to carry a woman to the hospital because she was having a panic attack and later that day I was told by a student that she saw a girl in a bathroom stall with four men, I mean what the hell was she thinking, so I had to go handle it by kicking them out of the building. I didn’t even need to ask what she was doing, (laughs) feel me,” said Treyman.
The most ironic thing about it is that most of the people the guards watch over at the college may not get a chance to see what the guards do, which can cause a misconception of them.
Dixon Victory is a freshman who has already built his own image of the guards.
“The security around here is very loose; the system of signing students in if they do not have their cards is very bad because they can just write anything,” said Victory.
The guards are able to sense the lack of respect some of the student shave for them and it is also obvious from the similar answers that the student gave when asked about their colleagues’ protection.
“I know that they are students just like us so sometimes they will do their job and other times they will let their friends in without checking their cards,” said Krystal Jackson, a junior at the college
Kathy Bernard knows that the guards did show some favoritism towards certain students because she is one of them.
“The John Jay security guards are on a power trip, they need to go back to training but they still won’t serve a purpose” said Miss Bernard.
Miss Bernard is a graduate student who works for the Women Rights Center and is fed up with the guards’ hypocritical tendencies.
“They love raising their voices to tell me what to do and tell me not to double swipe when they do the same thing, and then try to act nice when they find out that I am apart of the staff which is not fair to the other students here,” said Bernard
The guards also have their own answer for the hostility they receive.
“All people think we do is sit on our ass all day, I must admit the job is easy for me but there is still the possibility of something going down” said George.
Security guard Jasmine Butler had the same misconstrued view of the guards before she started working four mouths ago and has already changed her mind.
“I have not seen some real action on the job but I did have a very bad view of guards before I became one, you have a better appreciate for the position when you are actually one of them,” said Butler
According to the Security Department manual, the position calls for students to complete a collection of training exercises that comes up to 24 state mandate hours. One of those exercises includes the students completing sixteen hours of lectures on the rules of the school, the security department, and what is expected of them as guards. As well as another six hours of probation on the job and the rest is made up on safety tips.
“We expect are guards to be mindful of people’s feeling, be aware of their environment, and protect the students of John Jay and their properties,” said Rabiyyah Williams, a Security Department’s offices employee who was also an ex-security guard herself.
The job also calls for the applicants to have the general of requirements of being an full time undergraduate with a GPA of at least 2.5. Their status must be above freshman level.
The guards are trained in CPR, crowd control, and the himelic maneuver for the students’ safety. There are also put on alert for any specific individuals that are planning to enter the school to harm a student; this service is especially good for the female student body that may have uncontrollable ex- boyfriends. There is a fair amount of homeless people in the area and it is their job to make sure that they do not come around the building to bother the students, which guard Franny Jerkins, say that may be the most difficult thing about the job for her.
“I demand people take me serious because if something happens then it is my fault,” said Jerkins
Regardless of the negative criticism the guards get, there are still some people who defend the guards no matter what. Allison Karvey, a history professor of four years at the college, was attacked by one her students a year ago who was found to be mentally unstable.
“I teach around 9 pm at the college so you really notice them and feel safe when they are around, they actual walk me to the train stations on some account to make sure I got there safely,” said Karvey
Wednesday, October 8, 2008
थ्री स्टोरी Topics
Students who are about to graduate or are close to it are always complaining that after they receive their degrees, the options on what are available are very limited. Some students have no idea what they will be doing. The college has an internship office that offers students opportunities that may set them up with their next career or a large stipend of money to get their lives started. The career office at the college helps students as early as sophomore year with figuring out what they would like to do with their lives. Is the student’s uncertain attitude about their future really the college’s limited amount of available tools or the lack of effort put forth by the students?
Sources: Tinesha Ross is a senior who will be graduating next semester and will be accepting an internship at Albany but she did receive the information of the internship from the school.
Simon Okra is also a senior figuring out if he wants to go to law school and has complained about the lack of help he is getting in figuring out his future.
A next article could be about the life and times of a John Jay Security Guard. What does the job entail? Are there in really in any danger and what do they think about their job. What will happen if there was really a possibility of a treat at the college? Do the students feel safer when they have the guards? I plan to choose a few workers and record what a typical day is for them. I will try to find out who are their bosses? Are their any images that people may have of them and can the title do anything for them in the future.
A new sense of school pride can be seen in the classrooms and through out the hallways but in the form of John Jay apparel. The John Jay logo and name can be seen on hats, hoodies, sweaters, shorts, t-shirts, not to mention school supplies. They come in multiple colors from pick, baby blue, to green and it is one of the newest things this year for student to wear them. However, is there actually a sense of school pride going on or are these school apparels just a passing fashion statement. Most of the apparels don’t even come in the school’s colors which are blue and gold.
Source: Brad Demarco works at the John jay Barns and Nobles Bookstore which is the top seller for John Jay apparel.
I could interview students that have shopped at the bookstore and have used their actually money to pay for school apparel instead of using financial aid.
Sources: Tinesha Ross is a senior who will be graduating next semester and will be accepting an internship at Albany but she did receive the information of the internship from the school.
Simon Okra is also a senior figuring out if he wants to go to law school and has complained about the lack of help he is getting in figuring out his future.
A next article could be about the life and times of a John Jay Security Guard. What does the job entail? Are there in really in any danger and what do they think about their job. What will happen if there was really a possibility of a treat at the college? Do the students feel safer when they have the guards? I plan to choose a few workers and record what a typical day is for them. I will try to find out who are their bosses? Are their any images that people may have of them and can the title do anything for them in the future.
A new sense of school pride can be seen in the classrooms and through out the hallways but in the form of John Jay apparel. The John Jay logo and name can be seen on hats, hoodies, sweaters, shorts, t-shirts, not to mention school supplies. They come in multiple colors from pick, baby blue, to green and it is one of the newest things this year for student to wear them. However, is there actually a sense of school pride going on or are these school apparels just a passing fashion statement. Most of the apparels don’t even come in the school’s colors which are blue and gold.
Source: Brad Demarco works at the John jay Barns and Nobles Bookstore which is the top seller for John Jay apparel.
I could interview students that have shopped at the bookstore and have used their actually money to pay for school apparel instead of using financial aid.
Wednesday, October 1, 2008
CUNY Budget Cuts
It is very hard to put a price on a person’s education but due to trouble times, Governor Paterson will do exactly that to college students in New York City.
On August 19, 2008, Governor David Paterson slashed 51 million dollars from the CUNY school system’s budget to reduce state spending.
According to www.qcknightnews.com, the plan was introduced on July 30 of this year to address state finances for an economy Paterson could only described as "deteriorating." The governor's planned budgets cuts are suppose save $1 billion in 2008-2009 and $1.6 billion in 2009-2010.
The budget cuts are now reaching John Jay College of Criminal Justice for their fall 2008 semester and frustrated facial expressions can be seen through out the facility.
It is stated on web.cuny.edu that John Jay College still has one of the lowest tuition cost in the CUNY system. They charge up to $510 every three credits but the added increase in tuition combine with the already high prices for textbooks that can go as high as $180 for one book and commute money to the school can later add up for students who are already struggling with the prices.
The most common problem that every student at the college is facing is a $25 raise in the technology fee for this semester. The small increase may not seem that bad on paper but students like Betzabel Felipe who has already taken out a small loan of $1400 to pay for her tuition has something to complain about.
“I am working two jobs and helping my father pay the electricity bills, what kind government doesn’t look out for the students who have enough to worry about,” said Felipe. Despite the added on bills, Miss. Felipe was able to get into the college’s work system program that provides jobs for low-income students but due to the budget cuts, the money that she would receive from the work study job might not be worth the trouble of making time for it.
However, some jobs around the school have not seen a huge change from the reduce budget, for example, the Security department. Although, not everyone can be as lucky as John Jay security guard Daniel Persaud who has been on the job for two and a half years.
“Man, I barely even notice the budget cuts because we don’t get paid through the school. Our state union, DC37, pays us. We are actually receiving a raise of 16 cent soon. The budgets cuts aren’t really affecting us. If the cuts are affecting our department, I don’t know anything about it” said Persaud.
The rest of the students who are getting paid by the school will see a payment change that they won’t like. The amount of money that students received from the school’s work study program has gone down. Workers at the Student Assistants office were force to work the same hours but take a pay cut depending on how long they worked there and how much they got paid before.
“They are hiring less and less people to a point where it is becoming damn near impossible to get all the work I’m suppose to get done that day and I rarely have time to do some homework. I have to consider if I will be able to keep this job” said Stanley Mulu, a Connection Peer Mentor for the school.
According to Mulu, the amount that a student would received two years ago for working at the school was anywhere from 12 to 15 dollars but now the average amount is from 8 to 10 dollars which some students depend on to help them stay in school.
Student Akiele Reason was forced to drop most of his classes due to cut backs on Financial Aid and scholarships funds. “They told me that I was making too much money working at Sears. I don’t get it. I was making the same amount that I did last semester. I’m not paying that entire tuition for five classes, I can only take two this semester,” said Reason. The cut in financial aid has affected many different forms of aid around the school.
Students who have received the New York Merit Scholarship in the past have lost more than half of it. The scholarship was made for students who were able to maintain a 3.2 GPA through out their college semester. The scholarship was originally set at $500 a semester but went down to $239 for some students like Guy Legagneur who has to pay for school for the first time since he entered John Jay.
“I can’t really do anything about this but just keep moving along and pray that I don’t lose more next semester, it was a nice ride while it lasted,” said Legagneur
Not only has the budget cuts added on pressure for students to pay their bills on time but it has also limited their extra curricular activities as well. According to the jjay.cuny.edu, there are currently 17 official clubs in John Jay and they all will be expecting a deduction in funds that helps support their events.
The Student Council Department, who handles the clubs in John Jay, received a budget cut of $30,000 from the amount they had last year. Brunel Jaheum, Student Council Department assistant, stated that the main problem has stemmed from an increase in enrollment in John Jay which has lead to a growth in new clubs. “The council can not take care of everyone,” said Jaheum
Clubs’ presidents and founders are now facing the dilemma of how to keep their clubs from going under due to lack of funds. John Jay Debate Team’s Vice-president Ivan Wilson will have to deal with the problem of figuring out how many students can actually participate in tournaments this semester.
“I couldn’t believe my eyes when I saw how much we were given. We are trying to make sure these students can have something to look forward to when they do extra research for the team and some of them can’t even go to the debates to watch,” said Wilson
The amount that was asked by the club was $5000 and there were only given $2800 dollar which they need to pay the cost for the student’s travel to the debate, admission fee, and have someone judge the contestants.
“Debating is a skill that can help the students beyond their years here, and some won’t be able to get the full experience,” said Wilson
Not only are the present clubs having trouble but the clubs that are trying to get started are not doing any better. Rachel Ramirez and Sifat Azad started the Fiction Writing Association three semesters ago. The Association is a club made for student to express their artistic side through writing exercises and story development. The two still have not received funding for the publication to put out student’s stories.
The budgets cut has force both club executives to put their club dream on hold for now maybe indefinitely which has ruined other student’s plan for the future.
Sophomore Regina Wong has been looking forward to the club’s first meeting for some time. “I been hearing about it since my freshman year, I know that it take a while to get everything started but all I hear is that they don’t have enough funding.” said Wong.
Both Ramirez and Azad planned to leave the school after this semester to enter other institutions to look for opportunities that the college may not be able to offer, for example, a more solid English major, a more diverse course package, and they have added their club’s struggles to the list.
“The students are getting cheated out of their college years, plain and simple” said Ramirez
On August 19, 2008, Governor David Paterson slashed 51 million dollars from the CUNY school system’s budget to reduce state spending.
According to www.qcknightnews.com, the plan was introduced on July 30 of this year to address state finances for an economy Paterson could only described as "deteriorating." The governor's planned budgets cuts are suppose save $1 billion in 2008-2009 and $1.6 billion in 2009-2010.
The budget cuts are now reaching John Jay College of Criminal Justice for their fall 2008 semester and frustrated facial expressions can be seen through out the facility.
It is stated on web.cuny.edu that John Jay College still has one of the lowest tuition cost in the CUNY system. They charge up to $510 every three credits but the added increase in tuition combine with the already high prices for textbooks that can go as high as $180 for one book and commute money to the school can later add up for students who are already struggling with the prices.
The most common problem that every student at the college is facing is a $25 raise in the technology fee for this semester. The small increase may not seem that bad on paper but students like Betzabel Felipe who has already taken out a small loan of $1400 to pay for her tuition has something to complain about.
“I am working two jobs and helping my father pay the electricity bills, what kind government doesn’t look out for the students who have enough to worry about,” said Felipe. Despite the added on bills, Miss. Felipe was able to get into the college’s work system program that provides jobs for low-income students but due to the budget cuts, the money that she would receive from the work study job might not be worth the trouble of making time for it.
However, some jobs around the school have not seen a huge change from the reduce budget, for example, the Security department. Although, not everyone can be as lucky as John Jay security guard Daniel Persaud who has been on the job for two and a half years.
“Man, I barely even notice the budget cuts because we don’t get paid through the school. Our state union, DC37, pays us. We are actually receiving a raise of 16 cent soon. The budgets cuts aren’t really affecting us. If the cuts are affecting our department, I don’t know anything about it” said Persaud.
The rest of the students who are getting paid by the school will see a payment change that they won’t like. The amount of money that students received from the school’s work study program has gone down. Workers at the Student Assistants office were force to work the same hours but take a pay cut depending on how long they worked there and how much they got paid before.
“They are hiring less and less people to a point where it is becoming damn near impossible to get all the work I’m suppose to get done that day and I rarely have time to do some homework. I have to consider if I will be able to keep this job” said Stanley Mulu, a Connection Peer Mentor for the school.
According to Mulu, the amount that a student would received two years ago for working at the school was anywhere from 12 to 15 dollars but now the average amount is from 8 to 10 dollars which some students depend on to help them stay in school.
Student Akiele Reason was forced to drop most of his classes due to cut backs on Financial Aid and scholarships funds. “They told me that I was making too much money working at Sears. I don’t get it. I was making the same amount that I did last semester. I’m not paying that entire tuition for five classes, I can only take two this semester,” said Reason. The cut in financial aid has affected many different forms of aid around the school.
Students who have received the New York Merit Scholarship in the past have lost more than half of it. The scholarship was made for students who were able to maintain a 3.2 GPA through out their college semester. The scholarship was originally set at $500 a semester but went down to $239 for some students like Guy Legagneur who has to pay for school for the first time since he entered John Jay.
“I can’t really do anything about this but just keep moving along and pray that I don’t lose more next semester, it was a nice ride while it lasted,” said Legagneur
Not only has the budget cuts added on pressure for students to pay their bills on time but it has also limited their extra curricular activities as well. According to the jjay.cuny.edu, there are currently 17 official clubs in John Jay and they all will be expecting a deduction in funds that helps support their events.
The Student Council Department, who handles the clubs in John Jay, received a budget cut of $30,000 from the amount they had last year. Brunel Jaheum, Student Council Department assistant, stated that the main problem has stemmed from an increase in enrollment in John Jay which has lead to a growth in new clubs. “The council can not take care of everyone,” said Jaheum
Clubs’ presidents and founders are now facing the dilemma of how to keep their clubs from going under due to lack of funds. John Jay Debate Team’s Vice-president Ivan Wilson will have to deal with the problem of figuring out how many students can actually participate in tournaments this semester.
“I couldn’t believe my eyes when I saw how much we were given. We are trying to make sure these students can have something to look forward to when they do extra research for the team and some of them can’t even go to the debates to watch,” said Wilson
The amount that was asked by the club was $5000 and there were only given $2800 dollar which they need to pay the cost for the student’s travel to the debate, admission fee, and have someone judge the contestants.
“Debating is a skill that can help the students beyond their years here, and some won’t be able to get the full experience,” said Wilson
Not only are the present clubs having trouble but the clubs that are trying to get started are not doing any better. Rachel Ramirez and Sifat Azad started the Fiction Writing Association three semesters ago. The Association is a club made for student to express their artistic side through writing exercises and story development. The two still have not received funding for the publication to put out student’s stories.
The budgets cut has force both club executives to put their club dream on hold for now maybe indefinitely which has ruined other student’s plan for the future.
Sophomore Regina Wong has been looking forward to the club’s first meeting for some time. “I been hearing about it since my freshman year, I know that it take a while to get everything started but all I hear is that they don’t have enough funding.” said Wong.
Both Ramirez and Azad planned to leave the school after this semester to enter other institutions to look for opportunities that the college may not be able to offer, for example, a more solid English major, a more diverse course package, and they have added their club’s struggles to the list.
“The students are getting cheated out of their college years, plain and simple” said Ramirez
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